
"More school moronitis disease"
04 / 11 / 06
What is the main point of this paper?Wrong, idiod. My thesis was the very last sentence in the first paragraph. It was in plain sight, like roaches on a hill of shit. And I quote, "Yaoi and slash works provides fans with an aesthetic and therapeutic outlet, allowing for exploration of the imagination and of sensuality for women as individuals." I said nothing about simple erotic stimulation. Nothing.
From what I can gather, the point is that women have, from a lack of industry created erotic stimulation, created their own supply to meet their demand. Furthermore, entertainment industries should take advantage of the “window of opportunity” from this untapped market.
What is the greatest strength of this paper?Way to say a lot of nothing.
I suppose the greatest strength is in-depth look into each section of the paper. It is very detailed and organized in a way I found to flow.
What material does not seem to fit the main point of the paper or does not seem to be appropriate for the audience?I'm not impressed with this answer. Keep reading to understand why.
I can’t find any to be honest. From what I can see, the content clearly follows the author’s intent to stay to the point.
Has the author sufficiently addressed counter-arguments? Explain your answer.And that's why I'm not impressed. First, it's not all about the sex. But I would be remissed in presenting the topic if I didn't mention sex at all. However, I feel this person only focused on the sex and didn't bother reading anything else about the paper, like how yaoi and slash is more than just sex, thankyou. But I digress.
This was a topic I was really unable to counter-argue. As a male who really doesn’t support the porn business, I don’t have the ability to relate to desire for erotic stimulation from a female’s perspective. I don’t condone it, but then not condoning male porn doesn’t take care of the problem either.
What is your favorite part of this piece of writing?You're not going to identify with a topic you already claimed you can't connect to.
I think some of my answers describe how I would have a difficult time answering this. While I think it was well written, I didn’t identify with a specific paragraph where I went, “oh, now that struck to the heart of the matter”.
What other comments can you provide for the author?Yes, because your displeasure of the topic would just make my world crumble and turn to dust, all to fly away on the winds of sorrow.
This was honestly a hard thing to review, not because I’m displeased by your topic, but because I don’t have the ability to relate.
I think that it was a bit too technical, but then that could just be my personal style. At times I just felt like I was trying learn about the subject, not being drawn into the topic.I don't think I need to comment on this. But I will anyway. If you already state you can't connect to a topic, what in the blue blazin' Mary would make you think said topic would draw you in? And learning about the subject? That's kinda the effin' point.
Sorry, spammers forced my hand. Comments reviewed before being published.
Comments: 1 wind
Wow. That's. I mean, even if you don't agree or relate to the subject matter, you should still be able to provide useful critique. This guy's either dumb or just apathetic.
And if yaoi/slash was just about the porn, there wouldn't be stories without sex in them. Geez.
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